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Brief Scene Idea
Brief because I'm really busy and I'm not really a writer for this sort of story. I'm more of an idea sorter and composer.... so here's my rough imagining of a scene. Also, some of what I am writing includes background information, and no distinct dialog... since I have no idea how to write this sort of scene without details of the crime.
Pan-Panel: Setting: Inside the Café. Murphy is sitting at his usual table. Going over the case. Papers and photographs all neatly lined up and sorted. Pauline is behind the counter, hunched over the counter, writing on receipts.
Panel: We see Pauline is actually doodling the scene of the crime that Murphy is investigating (to which she compiled from her various trips to Murphy's table). Pauline has an epiphany.
Panel: Pauline looks up at the detective. Thought balloon describe a thought of hers of some breakthrough. Something that was missed, but fits. It's in one of the photos. But the Detective had not picked it out yet, because he is still mulling over this particular problem.... (let's say its the murder weapon... something non-traditional... "not found" at the scene, though a photograph of the scene catches it in the shot).
Panel: Murphy is looking a tad frustrated at this point. Starring down at the written report.
Panel: Pauline comes up to the detective with a "Hey, hun, looks like you could use more coffee/another pastry. Staying late again?" Murphy, "I think I may call it a day soon. Just can't figure out what he used!" (or something)
Panel: Pauline now assorts a napkin on the table to put a new coffee/pastry down. She "accidentally" pushes the key photo to "make room" for the napkin. The photo is positioned to really showcase the location of the murder weapon (which should be something that was found in the area and probably used... like a pipe or some other typical "alley" item.). Paulline, "I'm sure it's right under your nose. You just gotta stick to it!" (or something) Murphy, "Yea..."
Panel: Murphy has reached for his coffee/pastry and notices the photo out of place. With his coffee in his hand, he uses his other hand to push it back into place.
Panel: He pauses. He sees it. Murphy mutters, "Bridget...", Off panel: Pauline, "Hmmm?"
Panel: Wide shot of both of them. Murphy, "I think I will be staying late after all." Pauline, Smiles, "I'll put a new pot on!"
Pan-Panel: Setting: Inside the Café. Murphy is sitting at his usual table. Going over the case. Papers and photographs all neatly lined up and sorted. Pauline is behind the counter, hunched over the counter, writing on receipts.
Panel: We see Pauline is actually doodling the scene of the crime that Murphy is investigating (to which she compiled from her various trips to Murphy's table). Pauline has an epiphany.
Panel: Pauline looks up at the detective. Thought balloon describe a thought of hers of some breakthrough. Something that was missed, but fits. It's in one of the photos. But the Detective had not picked it out yet, because he is still mulling over this particular problem.... (let's say its the murder weapon... something non-traditional... "not found" at the scene, though a photograph of the scene catches it in the shot).
Panel: Murphy is looking a tad frustrated at this point. Starring down at the written report.
Panel: Pauline comes up to the detective with a "Hey, hun, looks like you could use more coffee/another pastry. Staying late again?" Murphy, "I think I may call it a day soon. Just can't figure out what he used!" (or something)
Panel: Pauline now assorts a napkin on the table to put a new coffee/pastry down. She "accidentally" pushes the key photo to "make room" for the napkin. The photo is positioned to really showcase the location of the murder weapon (which should be something that was found in the area and probably used... like a pipe or some other typical "alley" item.). Paulline, "I'm sure it's right under your nose. You just gotta stick to it!" (or something) Murphy, "Yea..."
Panel: Murphy has reached for his coffee/pastry and notices the photo out of place. With his coffee in his hand, he uses his other hand to push it back into place.
Panel: He pauses. He sees it. Murphy mutters, "Bridget...", Off panel: Pauline, "Hmmm?"
Panel: Wide shot of both of them. Murphy, "I think I will be staying late after all." Pauline, Smiles, "I'll put a new pot on!"
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